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The last call [Short poem]

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Tsidia, the mind player
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The last call [Short poem]

Post by Tsidia, the mind player » September 16th, 2017, 10:16 pm

~Tsidia~
This is the last call
Stringmasters fall
Where the lies cross
And the truths unfold

If you are here
Silence my scream
Without you though
I am no more
"Break your chains and make your move, or you'll only see a dreamwavers wall"

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Tsidia, the mind player
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Re: The last call [Short poem]

Post by Tsidia, the mind player » September 16th, 2017, 10:17 pm

Feel free to express how much of pure_garbage/masterpiece it is and what improvements can be made. I'm open to all kinds of criticism as long as I can learn from it
"Break your chains and make your move, or you'll only see a dreamwavers wall"

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Re: The last call [Short poem]

Post by Mazrogal » September 19th, 2017, 3:24 pm

Well hmm have no critique to give other then it seems a bit short but then again you wrote in title it was short. Other then that i like the wording of it.
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